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Published: 2006-02-28 09:11:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 110; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 0
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Description I’d like to see you come undone.

With frown lines and disregard,
   Forest-fires in your eyes.  

The mannequins are tired of you stealing their smiles
  (While all I dream about Is suicide)


How is it that passion pours through veins
Joy lights up faces
Hope cures diseases,

And I am still sick on a bathroom floor.
  (in a place that is not home)




I want to be there when you break down.

Your constant perfection like a slap in the face
   Vision blurred through black eyes
      (my soul declined)





Pour your blood onto paper and send it in an envelope addressed to the lost -
  
      I’ve been waiting.
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Comments: 5

EbonDawn [2006-02-28 19:53:42 +0000 UTC]

You're really good at those strong, nearly impassive endings.

A very strong piece, with a clever statement. The only way to reach someone is to relate through thier feelings. Any feelings.

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ghostsofyou In reply to EbonDawn [2006-02-28 23:52:55 +0000 UTC]

yes! you didn't find anything wrong with this one! no, i'm joking. i love your insight and suggestions on improvement. thankyouuu.

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EbonDawn In reply to ghostsofyou [2006-03-01 15:19:05 +0000 UTC]

lol sorry, you know what they say... well... I say "A good poet never stops improving"

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Drumboy [2006-02-28 09:32:47 +0000 UTC]

wow, I love it

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ghostsofyou In reply to Drumboy [2006-02-28 23:51:41 +0000 UTC]

thanks

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