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Ciclopotis — FlutterPie - Part 2
Published: 2011-09-23 05:01:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 6944; Favourites: 23; Downloads: 145
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This is the continuation of my fan-fiction. It's a little bigger, one page longer, but this way I should be able to devide it 3 parts instead of 4. Hopefully, some issues with the lining won't happen like they did in the previous part. Remember, comments are always welcome ;DOnce again, I do not own Fluttershy, Pinkie Pie or My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic (c), they are property of Lauren Faust/Hasbro.
EDIT: The cover image was made by kazababomb, check out his channel for more greatness! [link]
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she really liked it boy howdy yall gotta imagination that could kill.keep up the good work.
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This is really, really good. You've got a talent for heart-meltingly sweet scenes.
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Can I suggest giving character dialogue their own lines? For example:
"oh I'm sorry," said Fluttershy. "You must hate me now."
"Don't be silly!" replied Pinkie pulling Fluttershy into a hug. "I'll never hate you."
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Hmm, yes, I see what you mean, it's just that I'm used to writting it all in a row. But I'll see about doing it, it should make reading simpler, thanks for the suggestion!
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No problem. I will admit it does make it harder to read with all that. I did the same thing until someone pointed it out for me and going back to fix it I can read my stories better now.
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Very cute. I love how shy and sweet Fluttershy is and that she kissed Pinkie. Look forward to the next part.
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I'm glad that you liked, I really can't tell when I'm going to upload the next part, it may be today already or next week only.
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I love PinkieShy/FlutterPie. Either way I look forward to it.
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