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Edit! I changed panel one so the background was duller, made it more purple, brightened and increased the lighting and shading colors on Ebee, and then added a thick black outline around her. I think it looks much better this way! Thank you for the small critique, Earldense !
What do you think? End EditI originally only had 5 pages to post today, but yesterday I had an unexpected amount of free time so...here's an extra (It helps that the background is still just a copy&paste party). I also considered waiting until next Tuesday to post this page with whatever other pages I had...but, the page after this one is kind of a doozy (Doozy is an understatement, it's a twist!), best to post this one now and give page 5 it's space.
Panel one...Ebee is offically done, haha.
In case you can't tell, Muzzless is supposed to be making quotation marks with his claws in the air. Muzzless, tone down the sass please.
Last panel, Muzzless's face is saying "You poor ignorant thing." Ebee isn't buying what you're saying yet.
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First thing, Muzzless is awesome (the whole comic is) and second, this is now reminding me a little of the (rather inappropriate but still awesome) anime/manga "Good Luck Girl"...
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Thank you! I'm glad you like it.
Haha, I just read the plot. I can see the similarities!
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You're welcome! I can't wait to see more! The art in this is amazing. Your style suits the plot.
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Lmao, I really like Muzzless so far, he's great and I love all of his expressions
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Thank you! I'm so glad you're enjoying his character
Were you done with this comment, or is that 'I' just loitering?
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Oh I didn't even realize I typed that 'I'
but yeah that was the end of my comment
And yes, Muzzless seems pretty cool so far and I'm
intrigued about what he said and what Ebee
may "actually" be
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Everything has been great, I just have one suggestion for this page: The background color of the first panel is a bit jarring, it's such an intense blue and Ebee has such muted colors. Highly saturated colors draw attention, so basically what you're saying is that we're supposed to focus on the background instead of Ebee...but there's nothing in the background. If you don't want there to be an actual background, you should do something like in the last two panels where the blue isn't as saturated.
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That's a good point! It is a bit bright now that you mention it, I think what I was going for was a more whimsical color to go with Ebee's humorous face and highlight the joke, but I think you're right. I'll go back and rethink my color choice 
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A whimsical color scheme would work well for the joke, but you'll still need to make the foreground brighter and the background duller. basically, make Ebee's colors (or just the shadows) more saturated, not just the background.
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That's a good idea, I'll try that and make the background more like the other two
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Ahhh!!! I love Muzzless!!!!!! Lol Ebee's face in the first panel. XD And I think you nailed the quotations with Muzzless' claws.
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Haha, she's having none of his nonsense! And thank you! 
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hum, the story is getting interesting!
I liked muzzless's design
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Glad you think so!
And thank you 
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Also, the chapter cover, info page, and pages 1-4 are on Tapastic as well! tapastic.com/episode/64268
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