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gutterbreed โ Tokyo Lights
Published: 2005-08-21 10:50:19 +0000 UTC; Views: 101; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 12
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I hold the camera to my eyeas he says
You`re not a tourist here
Straightening his french maid dress,
tugging the sleeves
higher
even higher
above thin wrists, three plastic gemstone rings
His shoulders hunch in and I am instantly reminded
of the way rain turns on cue
(wind-worn)
His eyes drawn to something
on the ground
that I will never be able to see
Pointing to neon angels, he says
Welcome to Harajuku,
[and he looks so lonely that
I want to cry]
Then I hear a click
as his face turns up
toward the Tokyo Lights
And oh, what a picture
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It is a photo of the photo they`ve said right. Anyway I think I got the sense of the poem but I dont understand the sense of this line:
"of the way rain turns on cue
(wind-worn)"
Iยดd like some help understanding, waht do you say? what is it cue? you are talking about the clothes? right?
Then maybe I'll be able to say something.
Greets
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well, hello. I liked this. I will be reading more of you.
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Intriguing. I'll have to look at more of your work.
Nits:
[and he looked so lonely that/I wanted to cry] Should this be in past tense?
"Que" should be "cue."
~M
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Okay, I love the way the poem itself is a like photograph of the moment you're photograph. I agree with *Kohakuiro , it's definitely sad, but with the ending (the looking up), it brings the reader up, too.
Write on!
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i like this alot ... i am partial to tokyo ... been a couple of times ... the piece is very sad and yet uplifting in a strange way!
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