Hazama-Yuutou In reply to ??? [2016-09-17 17:23:32 +0000 UTC]

Some advice; don't make your characters super powerful like a lot of the characters in the Dragon Ball franchise. It's the most Mary Sue-ish thing to do, and it bores your audiences quicker than anything.
Don't make a character who is blood-related to an official character. That's also very Mary Sue-ish.
And, most importantly, do not give you character something similar to special blood. Like blood that burns a hole through the ground. It's... honestly kind of stupid, if you ask me.

As a writer, these are all basic flaws to stay away from, because it won't lure people into the literature itself. It's like the Bible. Things like this make it boring and dull.

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Hazama-Yuutou [2016-10-03 03:14:57 +0000 UTC]

but thank you for your input and honestly if he didn't got to DBZ he would be getting his ass kicked all the fricken time he has a lot of power but he didn't know how to use it 

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Hazama-Yuutou [2016-09-17 21:06:37 +0000 UTC]

yeah u can just send me a note as a responce

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Hazama-Yuutou [2016-09-17 18:52:35 +0000 UTC]

to be fair the the only reason his blood is that way is because of the nuclear reactor he has for a heart. Not to mention if you can beat him before he has the chance to power up then well you win pretty much. But you would not believe the OP shit has has to go up agenst in my coming chapters. Also he is not blood related to anyone from any series. His blood line is completely separate from any continuity. He had a seriously hard time beating Reimu that was a real challenge and in the end it was sort of a tie. He may be strong but summoning up that power in the dangerous part if he so chooses to do so then the radiation alone is enough to kill any normal human. He may have that power but he can't use it and if you think Proto is OP sister you haven't scean nothing yet. I have another OC coming up who is way stronger

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ChaseL06 In reply to ??? [2016-09-09 04:43:01 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to ChaseL06 [2016-09-09 05:50:50 +0000 UTC]

Thanks man

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Tanooki-John In reply to ??? [2016-08-11 01:23:07 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the watch, oh and you must be new here to DA.

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Tanooki-John [2016-08-12 01:07:27 +0000 UTC]

That I am

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MightyRaptor In reply to ??? [2016-07-22 05:38:53 +0000 UTC]

Welcome to dA

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to MightyRaptor [2016-07-26 21:00:24 +0000 UTC]

I have to admit I have never seen a twerking dinosaur before

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MightyRaptor In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-27 00:57:13 +0000 UTC]

interesting isn't it 

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to MightyRaptor [2016-07-30 22:28:18 +0000 UTC]

that it is

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Frostbite14300 In reply to ??? [2016-07-20 19:07:08 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-20 21:51:03 +0000 UTC]

I am should be fun doing stuff here!

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-20 22:32:05 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-21 01:20:02 +0000 UTC]

Yeah should be fun

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-21 02:09:39 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-21 03:42:11 +0000 UTC]

Yeah you should look at it when its up

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-21 04:07:28 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-30 18:36:23 +0000 UTC]

don't be to hard on your self I revise my work at least 3 times before I ut it out there

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-30 20:14:46 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-30 21:26:29 +0000 UTC]

so you lack inspiration is that it? I have a number of ideas swirling in my noggen if you want some

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-30 21:59:14 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-30 22:17:23 +0000 UTC]

ok give me a moment what genre are you focusing on?

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-30 21:11:17 +0000 UTC]

how do you mean?

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-30 21:20:43 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-30 21:35:53 +0000 UTC]

humm what genra are we working with here?

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-30 21:58:28 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-30 22:17:52 +0000 UTC]

do you want a supernatural them in your book?

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-20 21:47:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks, I am it should be interesting posting stuff on here (now all I need to do is figure out how to do so and we will be set)

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-20 22:32:35 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-20 22:51:29 +0000 UTC]

Fan fictions about a wisecracking fourth-wall breaking superhero that goes in between dimensions making jokes and helping people first chapter should be coming out sometime this summer

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-20 23:07:00 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-21 01:20:50 +0000 UTC]

My own custom one name is Proto has a nuclear reactor for a heart you will see soon enough

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-21 02:09:25 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-21 03:26:40 +0000 UTC]

Yeah I think it gonna be pretty cool

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-21 04:08:08 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-21 18:02:08 +0000 UTC]

Thank you : )

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-21 18:32:39 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-27 15:07:49 +0000 UTC]

Just posted chapter 1 last night

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Frostbite14300 In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-27 15:55:51 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to Frostbite14300 [2016-07-27 23:46:49 +0000 UTC]

Cool how did u find my channel?

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-20 22:56:22 +0000 UTC]

The Puns shall be real!

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House-of-Poses In reply to ??? [2016-07-19 19:07:48 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to House-of-Poses [2016-07-20 03:10:16 +0000 UTC]

"Why hello there ; )"

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WordyKite In reply to ??? [2016-07-19 15:15:51 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to WordyKite [2016-07-20 03:12:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for your help btw I really appreciate it

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WordyKite In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-20 03:24:43 +0000 UTC]

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SomeRandomWriter In reply to WordyKite [2016-07-20 21:47:46 +0000 UTC]

Perhaps I should return the favor keep the gift in motion?

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WordyKite In reply to SomeRandomWriter [2016-07-20 22:39:38 +0000 UTC]

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